Q&A: Please edit my radio script. also please give me some suggestions to make it more interesting? Thanks?

Question by ACID: Please edit my radio script. also please give me some suggestions to make it more interesting? Thanks?
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Answer by lorenzo
Write this in the 1st person, for example…

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