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Question by thecucumberfromak: Can you critique my script?
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EXT. BASEBALL STADIUM DOWNTOWN LOS ANGELES—AFTERNOON

FX. BASEBALL GAME

Large masses of people start to enter stadium. Three mysterious men walk into underground parking lot of the stadium placing some mysterious packages near the central beams that hold the stadium in place.

TITLE SCREEN SHOT OPERATION BLACK KNIGHTS

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INT. WHITE HOUSE SITUATION ROOM—AFTERNOON

DONALD
Who was involved? Why the stadium?

Arnold
We aren’t sure who is involved. My guess is a INTERNATIONAL terrorist group?

Aaron
What do we know?

President Jones walks into the room and everyone stands?

Jones
At ease gentlemen!

Everyone sits down in his or her seats.

Jones
What do we know?
Blake
Approximately half an hour ago a team of unknown terrorists placed several packages of C-4 explosive at Freedom Stadium in Los Angeles.
JONES
HOW MANY CASUALTIES?
MARC
I believe I can answer that?
JONES
Who are you?
BLAKE
Mr. President this is Marc Gomez; he is the special assistant to the Director of The Terrorism Task Organization.
MARC
43,000 killed and 1,000 injured. This was caused due to a sell-out game. The TTO currently have no leads on the supsects. So far no terrorists have laid claim to this attack. We are still monitoring radio, TV, and Internet.
JONES
What are strike options?
BLAKE
(POINTING TO A COMPUTER MONITOR)
Right now, we don’t know who is responsible! However we guess one of our top three enemies, either Russia, Iran, or Afghanistan.

BLAKE
In Russia, I suggest we bomb their military intelligence facilities and Nuclear Facilities.
JONES
What is the number of casualties?
BLAKE
15,000 including women, children, and men.
JONES
What is option number 2?
BLAKE
Option number 2 is a covert ops mission into the Afghanistan and Pakistan Border. This area is home to terrorist leader Abu Ghalini. AKA “The Prince”. This covert team will capture or kill “The Prince”.
BLAKE
Depending on number of terrorists hiding, approximately only 300 casualties, including terrorists. No innocent lives would be lost due to the location of the terrorist camp.
Jones
Excellent, What is our other option?
BLAKE
Option number three is very risky. It involves hiring some local Iranian people to participate in the overthrowing of the iranian government. I personally am sick how the Iranian government is ignoring the terrorism in their country.

JONES
Regardless of whoever carried out this attack I say we go with option 2.
PRESIDENT JONES TOSSES THE FOLDER OF OPTION 2 IN FRONT OF BLAKE.
JONES
How soon can you have a team together?
BLAKE
Within 72 hours sir!
JONES
Excellent, you all are dismissed!
EVERYONE BEGINS TO WALK OUT OF THE ROOM.
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INT. SHOT OF QUANTICO MARINE BASE!
BLAKE
Well Richard we have our orders. We are to assemble a covert ops team within 72 hours.
RICHARD
Let’s take a look at our personnel files. We need a group of five brave men.
BLAKE AND RICHARD BEGIN TO SIFT THROUGH FILES.
BLAKE
Gunnery Sergeant William Henry III, served two tours in Operation Iraqi Freedom, He received the Silver Star for single handedly rescuing 2 comrades.

RICHARD
Sounds like a leader to me. Here is another soldier. His name is PFC Adam Ruiz, born in Havana Cuba, became a citizen in 1991.
BLAKE
Tell me More.
RICHARD
His brother was the pilot on Flight 93. He has been on tour in Afghanistan since 2001. He was responsible for escorting a convoy of weapons found in Afghanistan.
BLAKE
Take him. We need him.
RICHARD
HERE WE GO, Sergeant Jack Huelter, member of security force used to protect Top military officials, Iraqi leadership, and other high valued personnel. He is the son of a former US Senator. His father was key on bringing the troops back from Iraq.
BLAKE
For the last team member, I recommend Petty, Officer Mike Thomas. He is an experienced communications officer. He has served on the USS Berkowitz.
RICHARD
I’ll make the calls tonight and we can have the group meet tomorrow morning. I’ll prepare the briefing.

BLAKE COMPILES THE PERSONNELL FILES TOGETHER AND WALKS OUT AND LEAVES.
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INT SHOT. OFFICE SPACE EVENING
RICHARD IS SHOWN RECLINING AT HIS DESK AND LOOKING AT HIS COMPUTER WHILE HE STARTS TO MAKE PHONE CALLS.
PHONE BEGINS TO RING
WILLIAM
Henry residents, May I Help You?
RICHARD
Hello Mr. William. This is Richard Lewis assistant to Secretary of Defense Blake Lewis.
WILLIAM
Oh, Hello Sir, What can I do for you?
RICHARD
A situation has arose tonight. We have orders from the President to assemble a covert-ops team in 48 hours.
WILLIAM
Are you talking about the attack on the stadium?
RICHARD
I wish I could go into more details about this mission, however when we were selecting the theam, your name came up.
WILLIAM
When do I start?

RICHARD
That is what I like to hear! You start tomorrow at 7 am. Report for duty at Quantico
WILLIAM
Yes Sir, I

Best answer:

Answer by Bryce
No. Not in this category, anyway.

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