Can you give me some feedback on this movie idea?

Question by Ryan: Can you give me some feedback on this movie idea?
The following is an outline for a movie I plan to make this Spring/Summer. I already have a screenplay in the works, but now I’m beginning to wonder if the conflict is big enough for the movie… What do you think? Is the problem big enough?

If Juniors could win superlatives, Jake Callihan would be voted ‘“most likely to succeed.” Between his father’s high expectations, and his own ambition to do well, Jake has worked non-stop his entire high school career, earning him high respect amongst his classmates and his teachers.
Not only does Jake get excellent grades, but he manages to balance his after-school time between work, baseball and of course, partying with his friends. His high standing in his school classifies him as a popular jock, and while he may deny it, this is a dead-on description of Jake. But while Jake Callihan may seem like an extraordinary kid, his life is far from perfect.
This is because of his demanding father, Mr. Callihan. Mr. Callihan isn’t necessarily a bad person; he just wants to see his son do well, and being a baseball-obsessed father, Mr. Callihan is relying on his son to earn a scholarship for playing the sport. But his strict methods are costing Jake his childhood.
It’s the last day of Spring Break, and after coming home late from a party with his best friend, Chris, Jake is lectured yet again by his father. Afterwards, Jake returns to his bedroom, where he lies in bed, staring at what he feels to be his only true friend; His guitar.
A few miles away, a girl sits in her room with her keyboard on low, playing a melody that creates the theme surrounding Jake’s depressed mood. Her mother walks in, and suggests she goes to bed, considering tomorrow is her first day in a brand new school.
With Spring Break being over, it’s back-to-work for Jake, who stays after school for classes and works overtime to earn a bad pay at his job in a local restaurant. His friend Chris, who may not be the brightest kid, is still aware that Jake is overworking himself, and convinces him to come to a bon fire at his house the coming Saturday Night. Jake agrees, but it doesn’t stop him from still working hard through the rest of the week.
He stays after school for extra help one day, and after going over his study guide with his teacher, gets his stuff and walks toward the front of the school. Not looking forward to going home, he walks slow, and it’s when he passes the music room that he stops dead in his tracks. Jake hears the most beautiful voice he’s ever heard. He looks through the window in the door, but to his disappointment, the lone girl in the classroom, whom he hears singing and playing piano, is just cut off through what he can see in the slim window. He dares not disturb her by opening the door, so instead sits outside the room for a moment or two, listening to her create music that sets him into an unbreakable trance.
He goes home, and in that unbreakable trance, develops a strong determination to figure out the song he heard on his guitar. When his dad comes home, he finds Jake lying in his bed playing guitar. His homework isn’t finished, he hasn’t worked out, and he hasn’t done his chores. In his disappointment, Mr. Callihan forbids Jake from playing his beloved guitar, unless permitted, which Jake knows would be rare.
As a response, Jake brings his guitar to school, where he can play in peace after classes. Just like the day before, but in vise-vera, this mysterious girl sits in a classroom, receiving extra help from a teacher, and is in awe when she hears what seems to be, a guitar… playing the song she wrote. ‘My imagination,’ she decides, and goes back to work.
After a quick week, Saturday arrives. Jake has a baseball game, but rushes to Chris’s house, where he relaxes with some of his friends, and even meets a couple new people. One girl, a Sophomore, stands out to Jake. He remembers hearing that she was new to the school, and wonders how she got invited to the bon fire. He is formally introduced to her by a friend of his, Megan.
“This is Amber,” she says to Jake. Despite an ironic feeling that they have already met, the two go through the night unaware that they have already entertained each other with their music. They talk, and get along well.
Chris brings out his guitar after it gets dark, and all of Jake’s friends ask for a little something from Jake. Enjoying the attention, Jake agrees, and begins to play the song that he heard after school by the mysterious girl… someone who is unknowingly five feet away.
He plays the song, and Amber, unsure how to react, drops her jaw. ‘That’s my song!,’ she thinks to herself. Assuming the song is Jake’s, everyone at the bon fire congratulates him on writing what everyone agrees to be a perfect song. It’s not until Jake gets caught up in the moment and accepts credit for writing the song, that Amber stands up in disbelief and argues with Jake. She then walks away toward the woods, and drowned in embarrass
and drowned in embarrassment and shame, Jake runs after. The two have a moment alone near the woods where he apologizes mercilessly and manages to regain his new friendship status with someone who he already is beginning to feel strongly about.
This girl that Jake meets is Amber Brown, a girl who moved to Jake’s town just a week ago, and began attending school after Spring Break. A girl from a wealthy family, Amber also seems to be a lucky person. Everyone thinks her life is great, just as they do with Jake. But after becoming good friends, Jake sees through the fake smiles and the forced laugh, to find a troubled girl, who seems to see nothing in herself.
Time goes on, and Jake and Amber have created an intimate relationship. The two play music together whenever their schedules allow, and they both write and play music that astounds both themselves, and those who take the time to listen.
The thing that Jake and Amber like about each other, is the fact that they live completely di
The thing that Jake and Amber like about each other, is the fact that they live completely different lives, but both seem to be the same “lucky type” to every person who judges them at first glance. Playing music together, Jake tries to show Amber just how talented she is. Amber begins to build a sense of self confidence.
One day, while in school, Jake sees a flyer for his school’s annual talent show. He pulls it off the wall, and puts it in his binder.
He shows it to Amber and the two decide to enter.
At one point, Jake tells Amber a bit about his life. His interest in baseball, his father, his job. He mentions that his father has taken every nickel he’s made, and put it in a bank account for when he’s older. But Amber notices that Jake always has money on him. She asks him where he gets the money, and instead of telling her, Jake shows her.
He drags her into New York City, with his guitar case on his back. Amber, wondering what Jake could possibly be doing to make money in the city, giggles and laughs as she demands to know where they are going.
Jake brings her to Central Park, where he finds a nice spot on the side of a path. He opens his guitar case and puts it by his side, takes out his guitar and starts playing. Laughing, Amber is in disbelief. She’s almost embarrassed to be with him, but she thinks it’s cute. The day goes on, and occasionally, a person will put a dollar bill in his guitar case. By the end of the day, Jake has 37 dollars and 47 cents in his guitar case. “It’s not much after paying for the train, but it’s fun to do every once in a while,” Jake says to Amber.
A few days later, Jake is at a baseball game, playing first base. He makes a great play, and after, notices a man talking to his dad in the bleachers. After the game, Mr. Callihan tells Jake about the man.
“That man was a scout,” he tells Jake.
“That man was a scout,” he tells Jake. A scout who thinks Jake might have what it takes to play for Duke University. After watching several of Jake’s baseball games, the scout talks to Mr. Callihan with the offer of a lifetime.
An entire Summer, practicing and working with the Duke baseball team. This opportunity raises Jake’s chances of a career in a professional baseball league about 100 times. Excited, yet sad to be leaving his home for an entire Summer, Jake calls Amber, and tells her the good news.
But this news goes from good to bad, when Amber reveals to Jake, that her family will be moving by the end of the Summer. The two realize that they have until the end of the school year, then it’s good-bye. The question dominates Jake’s thoughts; Summer with Amber, or Summer on the road?
It’s early June, and the two have been practicing hard over the past couple months. The talent show is Friday night, and the two get together one last time the Thursday before to practice. But when Jake goes to Amber’s house, he can feel that something is wrong. He notices Amber’s mom crying, a deathly silent and awkward mood dominates the atmosphere. Amber, although also visibly depressed, ignores her mother and brings Jake down into her basement, where she brushes him away when he asks what’s wrong. The two practice. The sound amazing. After practicing for a few hours, they decide they are ready, and Jake decides he should be going home.
He walks outside to his car, but Amber follows him out, saying he doesn’t have to leave. Jake figures it wouldn’t hurt to stay a little longer, so he sits on the curb, and they have a talk. Jake asks Amber why her mother was crying, and after hesitating, she tells him her secret.
“Have you ever lost something irreplaceable,” she asks.
Thinking hard, Jake realizes he hasn’t. He realizes he’s been very lucky. Amber comes out, and tells Jake what happened.
“Today is my sisters birthday,” she tells Jake. It turns out, Amber had an older sister. A smart, popular, pretty girl, just like Amber. They had a strong relationship, and with extremely demanding parents, the two turned to each other for comfort. But then things took a bad turn. Amber’s sister, Leah, would begin to skip dance lessons, and not show up for dinner. She’d ask Amber to lie for her when her parents became suspicious. Little did Amber know that the stress brought up on her by her parents to succeed was too much for Leah, and she would soon die of a drug overdose.
Telling Jake the story brings Amber to tears. He tucks her head into his chest and hugs her. She finds a sense of comfort and trust in Jake that reminds her of the closeness she felt with her sister.
Amber tells Jake that it was only in March when her sister died, and being it was extremely hard on everyone in the family, they decided to move, which explains why Amber came to this town, and why Jake always felt something was wrong.
He comforts her, and after a long and heartfelt talk, Jake looks at Amber. She looks at him. A long awaited kiss occurs, and from there on, no more words are necessary. Jake leaves, and before they know it, the day of the talent show finally arrives.
The two meet up at the school an hour before to set up. Excited and nervous, the two wait together in the music room, where they talk and laugh and take advantage of the short time they have left together. Then they go into the auditorium to help set up.
It’s 7:45, and the auditorium is filling up. Jake and Amber are dreadfully nervous, but they know they will do good.
Then the show begins, and after countless acts; some good, some bad, the time arrives for a final performance from a Mr. Jake Callihan, and a Ms. Amber Brown.
Their song astounds the crowd, and they leave the school afterward with compliments and comments praising their performance. They leave together, and they decide to stop at the beach for a little.
It’s late, and a street light manages to light up the view that Jake and Amber enjoy from the boardwalk. Leaning over the rails, looking out into the ocean, they talk.
“I have to do this,” Jake says to Amber. “I have to go.”
“I wasn’t expecting you to stay,” replies Amber. They both know that Jake leaving for the Summer would open up a door to countless possibilities.
“We’ll always be friends,” he says to her.
“Never like this though,” Amber says back.
It’s in this setting, that the movie ends, with both Amber and Jake knowing they still have until the end of June to finish up their relationship.
They hate to admit it, but they both know it’s just a high school relationship, and that’s all it could ever be.

The End

A Ryan Hutchins Film

Best answer:

Answer by Amy
yeh ur weird.

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