Is my letter too detailed, or overbearing ?
Question by the_force_q: Is my letter too detailed, or overbearing ?
I only want to know your opinion as far as the letter being too detailed, drawn out, overbearing, etc..
This letter is to a female that lives in a rehab facility next door to me.
If you deliberately avoid my question, and talk trash i’ll delete the question, and you’ll get no points …
Shannon: I hope this letter isn’t too deep for you
I couldn’t really think of anything to write
So I through in alot of details about me
Looking back on it, this sure is a wild letter …. ” laughs ”
I understand that your in a program, but we are both adults, and i’m not feeling all this creeping around stuff that we have to do, just to talk to each other. 3 or 4 months is a long time, and I don’t want to feel locked down with you, waiting for all that time to pass.
We have to come up with a better way of talking, without everyone knowing. But will figure something out.
555-101-2000 is my number. My bad for having that funky beer breath, and smelling like a bar that night. I didn’t think about it until now. So you have a daughter named Angel ? that’s cool, at 27 i’m surprised that I don’t have any kids. I think your really pretty and even hotter when you smile.
Here are a few things about me. I smoked weed for 10 years.
From the age of 15-25, but not long after quitting.
I traded addictions, and turned to alcohol. Things I like to do is chat with people on the internet, watch kung fu movies, exercise, listen to music, and sometimes make music.
I’m not sure if you’ve heard of Jackie Chan’s movie the Drunken Master, but that’s how I feel when I drink.
Kind of in my own world care free. None of my family, the black, or hispanic side can drink without getting into something.
When I’m drunk,
I have a habit of talking about whatever comes to my mind while sitting here alone in my living room.
I think about life, and alot of things, I free my mind but only after drinking. I be acting a fool – haha
Wether i’m singing, thinking about randon stuff, cussin someone out or whatever. I drink and let loose is what i’m trying to break down to you. Sorry for dissin you that 1 night.
I’m attracted to you more than those other chicks. All of them are too much to think about.
Try to find a palce where we can leave our letters, pick them up, and trade without getting caught.
I got a feeling someones gonna playa hate if they see me over there. You know ?
Best answer:
Answer by Aoibhneas
Your letter is fine. I just made a few grammar/spelling changes and joined some of the sentences together. It’s certainly not overbearing, only you can know if you have put in too much detail. It depends on your relationship with Shannon.
I think you’ve explained yourself well and put your feelings across. I guess you shouldn’t break the rules of rehab, but that’s up to you.
Hope things work out for both of you. Suggested corrections below:
Dear Shannon,
I hope this letter isn’t too deep for you.
I couldn’t really think of anything to write, so I threw in a lot of information about me.
Now that I’m re-reading it, I’m thinking that this sure is a wild letter …. ” laughs ”
I understand that you’re in a program, but we are both adults, and i’m not feeling all this creeping around stuff that we have to do, just to talk to each other. 3 or 4 months is a long time, and I don’t want to feel locked down with you, waiting for all that time to pass.
We have to come up with a better way of talking, without everyone knowing. But we’ll figure something out.
555-101-2000 is my number. My bad for having that funky beer breath, and smelling like a bar that night. I didn’t think about it until now. So you have a daughter named Angel ? that’s cool, at 27 i’m surprised that I don’t have any kids. I think you’re really pretty and even hotter when you smile.
Here are a few things about me. I smoked weed for 10 years from the age of 15-25, but not long after quitting.
I traded addictions, and turned to alcohol. Some things that I like to do is chat with people on the internet, watch kung fu movies, exercise, listen to music, and sometimes make music.
I’m not sure if you’ve heard of Jackie Chan’s movie the Drunken Master, but that’s how I feel when I drink.
Kind of in my own world – care free. None of my family, either the black or hispanic side can drink without getting into something.
When I’m drunk, I have a habit of talking about whatever comes to my mind while sitting here alone in my living room.
I think about life and a lot of things – I free my mind but only after drinking. I act the fool – haha – whether i’m singing, thinking about random stuff, cussin someone out or whatever. When I drink I let loose is what i’m trying to break down to you. Sorry for dissin you that 1 night.
I’m attracted to you more than those other chicks. All of them are too much to think about.
Try to find a place where we can leave our letters, pick them up, and trade without getting caught.
I got a feeling someones gonna play a hate if they see me over there. You know ?
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