My Spongebob Script, what do you think?

Question by Butcher: My Spongebob Script, what do you think?
Another slow day at The Krusty Krab, the home of the most delicious, mouthwatering, scrumptious food in the all Bikini Bottom. The spiders scuttled across the wooden walls that enclosed the restaurant, weaving a web at every corner. The lonely bills in the cash register rustled against each other as the wind scattered the dust off of them. A few drops of water trickled down the kitchen drain in a hollow sound that echoed around the empty place.

” Squidward!” Mr Krab screamed, darting out of his office, his eyebrows furrowed.

“What is it Mr, Krab?” Squidward asked in an unwilling tone, pretended to be interested in what the problem was.

“How many Krabby Patties have we sold so far?” Mr Krab asked angrily, glaring at the invisible customers.

“We haven’t sold anything Mr Krab, can I please go home yet? I’ve been stuck here for three days, three days!” Squidward plead, pointing at the bags under his eyes as his head slammed against the cash register

“Nobody goes home! And wake yourself up Squidward! Your behavior may scare away me money!” Mr Krab commanded, and headed towards the transparent door to welcome an ordinary passerby. He dragged him inside by his arm, ignoring his attempts to shove it back. Mr Krab pouted his lips. “I need a little help here” he mumbled to himself under his breath. “Spongebob!” he called, hauling the passerby up along the driveway.

“Let go of me manic!” the passerby begged

Mr Krab froze for a moment and gliding his hand down the passerby’s jeans, fumbling the coins he had in his wallet, clenching the cents that protruded through his pants.

“Wait a second money, I just can’t resist the sweet smell of …”

“Ahoy, Mr Krab!” Spongebob interrupted him mid-sentence, trying to understand what was going on.

“What took you so long boy? Quick, help me pull him in!” Mr Krab ordered, sniffing the passerby’s purse so hard that two penny got stuck in his nostrils.

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Answer by Serena
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