Q&A: im starting or at least trying to book here is the opening chapter what does everyone think.?
Question by pet_guy: im starting or at least trying to book here is the opening chapter what does everyone think.?
Good will Bigfoot hunting
“hello my name is luke, i live in a quiet little town in the shadow of Mt. Washington, I work as a biologist but so far I have put my knowledge towards cryptozoology” As luke sighed “and ohhh what a mistake”.
3 Days later.
Luke was sitting outside his house on his front porch looking at the birds feeding and fighting over the food, the dogs were barking, kids were riding their bikes, and skate boards. As always the neighbors were fighting attracting alot of attention as always. The mail man was coming down the road as always 11:15 A.M. As always. I sat and waited for my next study grant from the university. For along time I have been working on my Bigfoot study. As the mail man approached I pulled up out of the chair on the front porch and walked down my cracked and uneven side walk. I approched the mail man ” hi luke hows the world treating you” the mail man rodney said. “well you know the usuall” I said reluctantly ” ohh problems with the wife again” He said with a smile on his face ” wow you must be a pyschic” I said laughing ” yeah it happens well i gotta run 85 more houses to run, bye” he said putting his truck into gear and driving off with haste for the time i have taken from his busy schedule. I was walking up the side walk moving through and i saw that the universtiy had sent the check at least i hope. I opened the letter before entering my house. ” Mr. jaminson we are sorry to inform you that the university is making some budgett changes we are sorry to say that we are removing four-thousand from your fund leaving you with two-hundred dollars please inform us of any development in your studies, Good day” “WHAT THOSE THOSE, OHHH, WHY, HOW COULD THEY OF DONE THIS” I said as the neighbors looked at me throwing my mail and kicking that stupid looking yard knome. “o.k. you know what this is worthless this people cant even think up a good excuse” I said as my face was blood red.. I walked in and i looked around and my wife had two suit cases in her hand “umm honey what are you doing” i asked with a blank look on my face. “im leaving you” she said with an evil looking smirk on her face “why i thought we were doing good” i said “hahaha yeah right its nothing you think that your the best going to discover the missing link why were sitting with no cable, no water, barely any electricity im tired of sleeping on the floor” She said “but im about to crack it open big really big” i said just about to cry ” oh yeah like i havent heard that one before” she said As she bolted out the door leaving me not even enoguh time to say something. I went into the kitchen my face red from the anger over the university not funding me anymore or at least barely funding me and my wife leaving me huh what a great day so far.
6 hours later
Earlier I was reading the paper one of my few joys in life an add posted for talented, beautiful, and large men wanted. So i thought that the posistion called for a tall man that had some extre padding that had some experience. It said to come to the “long dong theatre” huh never heard of that one must be a new theatre that serves foot long hot dogs. I showed up at the theatre on the display it had two men with cowboy hats on and in the middle it said XXX huh i thought that movie was really old “oh well must be doing some sort of ceremony for it” So i walked in and i seen many different women looking at me.
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SO im writing a story on the journey of a man wanting to find and capture bigfoot now im going to post the rest but i do need to know if anyone thinks this looks ok from where im going because im not going to release it all until i get some oppinions so anyone think its good so far please tell me?
Best answer:
Answer by KG
Please work on punctuation, spelling, and sentence/paragraph structure. It might be the best story in the world, but no reader will stick with it for more than a few paragraphs with all those errors distracting them. A reader needs to feel like they’re in the hands of someone who really knows what they’re doing, or there is never suspension of disbelief.
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