Can you guys Edit my little brothers 6th grade essay…?
Question by Tom: Can you guys Edit my little brothers 6th grade essay…?
Today I’m going talk about of how to keep the earth clean, it is very important and easy.
If you see trash in the floor, just pick it up and throw it in the trash. They are very easy rules.
One other good thing you could also do is to recycle and keep our environment clean so we
can have better oxygen and a cleaner country. The most thing that we have to worry about
is that the fruits and veggies that we eat come from the ground and the ground becomes very dirtywhen we throw trash on the floor. That’s why just follow the rules and you will see a whole
difference on the Earth. We could all do our part to help the Earth by putting posters of throwing the trash in the waste basket.
My wish for the world having to do with the environment is to not kill lady bugs, because those insects are part of nature as well as bees, who are hard workers just like us. We work to provide food for our kids to go to school to have a better education. Now a days, you just see trash all over the floor I’m not going to lie to you, that takes away one minute of our life of all that air were breathing and is going to our lungs that’s what I wish that could happen to take care of our nature and we could have a better life. One good exercise kids can do is to water the plants because they are taking care of the planet and kids burn calories at the same time and like that they start eating their fruits and vegetables every day they arent going to be telling their parents they don’t like them their going be saying that they want them. Especially, if their parents make foods with vegetables which is very good and healthy. So that’ one good exercise for kids, well not just for the kids everybody can do that! We could actually save the poor animals that they kill just to feed us that’s why we should start thinking more about the environment.
The coolest thing in the environment are the trees and the grass, because they are the
things that give us oxygen. Without those things we wouldn’t be alive.
By now well we would be very dehydrated that our body wouldn’t have the oxygen that it needs to be healthy and strong. Especially the energy to run and stuff is just like the movie “Avatar”, when the guy gets on the machine and sleeps his avatar wakes up. It is very interesting how they make those movies. Back in the days they use to just be recording and be acting but now a days the movies look realistic and have a lot of action.
What I learn about the movie “Avatar” was that their was a couple one was a human and the other was from another planet and the human wanted to find out what it was that the avatars do, so the humans invented a machine that by their sleep they wake up in an avatar body to see what is that they do. It is a very awesome movie I want to watch it again and meet the directors and authors from the movie so I get could their autograph and put them on my room as I was saying in Mexico theirs no good oxygen it has a lot of chemicals and dirt, the people wish they had the oxygen that we have in the U.S.
Best answer:
Answer by Muninn
Sure, here you go. It was an interesting read, although I think it started to fall apart when your brother went off on the Avatar tangent. Anyway, I didn’t revise it, I edited it. At least it is grammatically correct now. (I still recommend that you sit down with him and help him make a more cohesive essay):
Today I’m going talk about of how to keep the earth clean which is very important and easy. If you see trash in the floor, just pick it up and throw it in the trash. These are very easy rules to follow. Another thing you could do is recycle and keep our environment clean so we can have better oxygen and a cleaner country. One thing we have to worry about is that the fruits and veggies we eat come from the ground, and the ground becomes very dirty when we throw trash on the floor. That is why we should follow the rules. One way that we could all do our part to help the Earth by putting posters of throwing the trash in the waste basket.
My wish for the world that has to do with the environment is to not kill lady bugs, because those insects are part of nature as well as bees, who are hard workers just like us. We work to provide food for our kids to go to school to have a better education. Now days, you just see trash all over the floor. It takes away one minute of our life of all that poisoned air we’re breathing and is going to our lungs. That’s what I wish that could happen to take care of our nature and we could have a better life. One good exercise kids can do is to water the plants because they are taking care of the planet.
Kids burn calories at the same time and start eating their fruits and vegetables every day. They arent going to be telling their parents they don’t like them; they are going be saying that they want them. Especially, if their parents make foods with vegetables which is very good and healthy. So that is one good exercise for kids that everybody can do! We could actually save the poor animals that they kill just to feed us by eating more fruits and vegetables. That’s why we should start thinking more about the environment.
The coolest thing in the environment are the trees and the grass because they are the things that give us oxygen. Without those things we wouldn’t be alive. By now we would be very dehydrated, and our bodies wouldn’t have the oxygen that it needs to be healthy and strong. The energy to run and stuff is just like the movie “Avatar” when the guy gets on the machine and sleeps and his avatar wakes up. It is very interesting how they make those movies. Back in the days they use to just be recording and be acting but now days the movies look realistic and have a lot of action.
What I learn about the movie “Avatar” was that there was a couple. One was a human and the other was from another planet. The humans wanted to find out what it was that the avatars do, so the humans invented a machine that by their sleep they wake up in an avatar body to see what is that they do. It is a very awesome movie. I want to watch it again and meet the director and authors of the movie so I could get could their autograph and put them on my room. As I was saying, in Mexico there is no good oxygen. It has a lot of chemicals and dirt, and the people wish they had the oxygen that we have in the U.S.
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