Is this a good personal statment for college?
Question by ¡Hash007(BLH:] !: Is this a good personal statment for college?
Anything I could change to make it sound better?
Hi, I am student from Summerhill School where I have been studying for five years. The GCSE subjects I have taken are: Maths (completed early A*), AS Level Statistics, English Literature and Language, General Studies, Separate Sciences, Graphics, DiDa (ICT), Spanish, Art, R.E and CBLC Italian. I am confident I will do well with my GCSE’s as I am a hard worker and try my best to keep to deadlines.
During my time at Summerhill I believe I have picked up essential qualities and skills which will help me in future plans. I approach everything I do with an enthusiastic and positive view so that I can be the best in what I do. Some of my key qualities are enthusiasm, hard work, organization and commitment. Getting a place in King Edwards College would be a fantastic opportunity for me to carry on learning new skills and develop further my aptitude.
For my work experience I went to a dentist’s laboratory for a week as I wanted to do something that involved manual work instead of sitting in an office. I found the workplace interesting however it was not what I had been expecting and I did not enjoy some of the jobs I was given. Nevertheless I worked hard on each task and did everything expected; this shows I can apply myself to things which I may not enjoy which is a useful quality. Some of the jobs I hate to do were making moulds of patients’ teeth from plaster, cutting them down to shape using specialist machines and general tasks including cleaning. I had to use my oral skills well for the jobs as they involved working with other colleagues and asking them for advice where I did not understand. My work experience also shows I can learn quickly because I knew how to use most of the machines safely after the first day. By the last day of work experience my supervisor trusted me enough to let me use the high risk machinery, I also had been through the whole process of making a fake tooth from start to finish. Other jobs I have done are a newspaper round which needed me to be punctual to deliver the papers on time. Furthermore some voluntary work I have done is helping out at my local mosque when there is an event; the jobs included cleaning and setting up decorations.
In school I would describe myself as reliable, honest, patient, smart and sensible. My favourite subject is graphics as I like the creative side to it and it is one of my stronger subjects. Other subjects I am good at are Maths, Science, ICT and Spanish. My weaker subjects are English and Art however I am working hard to become better at these subjects. I am a punctual student as I received over 95% attendance in each of my years at Summerhill. I enjoy participating in extra school activities as there are lots on offer at Summerhill. I have taken part in badminton and 5-a-side football sessions before school starts in the morning and after school football and cricket sessions. Also during year 7 and 8 I represented the school cricket team in my own time after school. I showed good team work skills as I helped my team to reach the semi finals in year 7 and successfully win the finals in year 8. I was elected form representative in year 7, this included conveying my form’s views to the school council which involved good communication skills.
Outside of school I enjoy sports a lot and I have tried many things. I played for Stourbridge Cricket Club from ages 8-13, Brierley Hill Bullets Football Club from 12-14 and Wordsley Wasps FC from 15 to present day. I also play badminton regularly with my dad every week and I have tried kickboxing for a few months. I find sports enjoying and satisfying after a victory, also they help me to keep fit and in good condition. Other things I enjoy doing in my free timesocializingising, going to watch movies, bowling, playing snooker and reading books which I find relaxing. I find these activities give me a release from school pressures and help keep on top of what I do.
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Answer by Julian C
its kind of typical try and make it sound more interesting
good luck
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