Q&A: please can you proof-read homework please!!!? thanx?

Question by 154: please can you proof-read homework please!!!? thanx?
Radio Script

Samira:
Welcome everyone; are you a big fan of Charlie Chaplin? Would you do ANYTHING to see him perform?

Santiago:
He is performing in Toronto tomorrow. So you better get out of your chair because tickets are almost sold out! Now we have a special report from our news reporter, Jordan McGuire.

Jordan:
Thank you. Right now I am experiencing one of the worst disasters in Toronto! A blizzard is approaching…visibility is absolutely zero! The volume of the snow is covering everything! Even our cameraman looks like a snowman.

Samira: We will be back after this commercial.

[Let it snow, let it snow, let it snow…]

Santiago:
Jordan? Jordan? It seems like we have lost our signal, folks.

Samira:
Great, we are back. From Toronto, with an update on the possible blizzard and disaster unfolding there as we speak, here’s Jordon.

Jordan:
Thanks!

Best answer:

Answer by Richard C
Instead of a blizzard approaching, it sounds like the blizzard has arrived!

Besides that, it reads well.

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